SERIAL Episode 9- "Loose Ends"

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:44 am

Hellsing wrote:

Natasja- Just be careful is all I'm saying, Juan. I can't believe your birthday is in a few days. Dont think I'm getting you anything, you little bastard.
JD- I'll be fine, silly. My life is full of gifts. *Natty smiles

That is just too cute :heart:

JD and Natty are still my favorites :dontknow:

I love them too. :heart:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:46 am

Hellsing wrote:

Auntie- I walk out this fucking house for a few days and Extreme Makeover: HELL Ediditon tranforms my fucking life.

^^ I missed Auntie

I love writing Auntie. This episode didnt have but very little of her but she wasnt as needed in this one and I wasnt going to let everyone see her and Tjs meeting just yet.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:48 am

Hellsing wrote:

*Ryan is pulling a big box off a shelf in the closet, shirtless

Wrong Ryan

I can see how that could be misconstrued but this character is the same Ryan as always. Our Ryan here has a character, Z, in it.

(Now that I have read down, I know you know that now.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:49 am

Hellsing wrote:

**Alex pouts and cuts himself with a scalpel where his heart would be.

I love your twistedness :heart:

Dead Alex is one of my favorite characters :yes:

I love picturing Dead Alex. Thanks about the twistedness..I like that about me too.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:50 am

Hellsing wrote:

(As she walks, Alex walks beside of her shaking his head. The sounds are of his neck cracking with each shake.)

:heart:

see what I mean?
That would look sooo good on tv.

That would be lots of fun on TV.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:52 am

Hellsing wrote:

Will I and Hailey or Z ever share a scene?

I will force it to happen somewhere, sometime.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:55 am

Hellsing wrote:

Great music choice as always

I always loved that song. I think you're referring to "Shame".

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:56 am

Hellsing wrote:

*Wout gets up angry and hears Anna moaning in the next room. He runs to her. She stares up at him, pupils dialated, points at him and laughs furiously.
Wout- Shut Up! What do you know, you fucking lunatic? WHAT?? If you don't stop this, I swear to God I will smother you where you lay.
*Anna keeps laughing.

I hope Anna cuts him open and eats his liver :heart:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:57 am

Hellsing wrote:

*Lt. Doll walks over to her desk. A picture of Auntie and Tjaman is on it.

I got some nice plans for this storyline.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:59 am

Hellsing wrote:

Poor Angelito getting framed for murder. It's because he's Puerto Rican, ain't it?

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:00 am

Hellsing wrote:

Bradin- You fucking whore. You're going to get just what you deserve.
*He picks her up and puts her in the car, puts the keys in and drives off.

Finally, Greta is getting something interesting to do.
I hope she kills Bradin :yes:

This scene was one of the ones that was changed MULTIPLE times. It was once graphic but because it was Greta, I couldnt deal with it. So this scene became MUCH shorter.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:01 am

Hellsing wrote:

JD- All that matters is I grew up handsomer than they did. *Smiles

:rolz:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:03 am

Hellsing wrote:

Ang- And that woman is still staring. (half-laughs)
JD- (looking in her direction) Can't say I blame her. The most she probably has to look forward to is a cucumber and a reality dating show.

:rolz:

How romantic :heart:

That was my favorite Jd line in this one.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:03 am

Hellsing wrote:

Natasja- Somehow I just worry this one will be different. You gotta watch those fucking redheads.

Rolz. Don't diss the Redheads, sista :heart:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:05 am

Hellsing wrote:

Poor Greta

Again, referring to the other comment, this about killed me which is why I couldnt get as graphic as I got on some other characters in other episodes.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:06 am

Hellsing wrote:

A baby is burning and decomposing in a cradle pointing at him with it's little hands.

nice dream

There is definite reason for this dream.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:06 am

Hellsing wrote:

Hell- You are a once-in-a-lifetime dream hero for a fucked up girl like me. I don't want to ever be another day without you.

awww :cry:

I'm glad you saw this just as I wanted it to be seen.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:08 am

Hellsing wrote:

Poor Liv, I don't like it when she's not in charge

I wanted there to be lots of anticipation on how terrible Liv would be to Hell and Garrett and instead, I wanted there to be some elements of the unexpected in this scene and also shows the "man in bandages" for who he really is. I didnt like giving that character the Noah name but I decided if I am ever in it in some way, Ill be a Joey.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:11 am

Hellsing wrote:

Noah- I am sick to death of hearing this.
*Noah shoots Liria in the head. The radio falls off the shelf and into the tub as Helen screams and drops the baby.
*Garrett goes for Noah's gun and kicks his hand, knocking it out.
*Hell grabs her mother, screaming. Garrett sees it all and the baby and screams and punches Noah. He looks for the gun and doesn't see it. He punches Noah in the face with all his might over and over again.
*Suddenly, Liv comes into the room with the gun and shoots Noah point blank screaming. Everyone is screaming at this point. Garretts face is covered in Noah's brains and blood.
Liv- Noone will EVER HIT ME AGAIN! Not you..Not my Mom..NOONE! *She shoots him again and again and turns the gun on herself.
*Garrett tackles Liv as Helen is still screaming and the last bullet goes into the wall.

Holy fucking Christ

I love what you did with Liv though, you made her more 'human'.
It's a shame to see Noah go so early

I wanted to get a little deeper with Livs pain in a subtle way. :rofl:

I also decided that I wanted to get out of this hostage situation without endangering Liv too much as a character. Glad you liked it. And I needed to get rid of Noah with the circumstances.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:13 am

Hellsing wrote:

I don't really like Jekyll :dontknow:

No Im kidding. :rofl:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:15 am

Hellsing wrote:

*Kaitlyn walks into the ladies room and opens up the letter.
It reads:
"I'm getting closer to you and when I find you, you will be dead!"

This was a second extension of the first time Kaitlyn received a threatening note in a previous episode.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:16 am

Hellsing wrote:

Hailies- (looking at Alex) Yes, Alex, I know. Eventually. I can't get rid of them now. We'll get it done soon enough. Eugene said he'd help me and everything. (Alex smiles at her, a worm crawling out of his mouth)

Heh, holy shit.
So Hailey is also evil now? Uh-oh

I wanted this scene to be a little HUH? More explained on that later.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:18 am

Hellsing wrote:

to be honest, I rather see Eugene and Hailey kill Ryan and Lauryn than the other way around :yes:

I know you have this unnatural hatred for Ryan and Lauryn and I dont understand why but people like what they like and dislike what they dislike. Theres no clarity as to whether either would happen.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:23 am

Hellsing wrote:

Angelito- Jd is always the one you liked more though.
Natasja- (in a moment of realization) Angel....

I have so many plans for JD/Angelito/Natty. Angelito will soon be more prominent than he has ever been in multiple storylines.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:24 am

Hellsing wrote:

aww, poor Natty and Angie

I hope they beat up that JD :yes:

Ang has some blame to receive too. But yes that JD needs beat, doesnt he? :bondage:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:25 am

Hellsing wrote:

Natasja- Enjoy the party. (to Ang) Especially you, Ang. I think you should be throwing all the parties from now on.

Hah :heart:

I enjoyed writing this scene.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:29 am

Hellsing wrote:

Heh, the last scene was cool.

Yay, I like Jekyll all of a sudden.

Glad you do. His character has some mystery surrounding him. It was basically for what he did to Greta and to get rid of an annoying character that I was even annoyed writing.

And the Auntie bit was to set up what shes going to do next episode as she is at her boiling point with this bullshit.

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:32 am

Hellsing wrote:

This was a great episode, Joey. Well wroth the wait!
Loved it. second favorite yet <3

Episode Ranking:
01: A Common Ground: ***** Stars
02: Loose Ends: ****1/2 Stars
03: What A Fine Fucking Mess: ****1/2 Stars
04: Motives: **** Stars
05: To Scare Is Human: **** Stars
06: Four Christmas Gifts: ***1/2 Stars
07: Auntie Up: ***1/2 Stars
08: The Pilot: *** Stars
09: Friends And Enemies: **1/2 Stars

Top 10 Characters of the episode:
1. Natasja
2. Liv
3. Ang
4. Ben
5. Alex
6. JD
7. Garrett
8. Auntie
9. Angelito
10. Hailes/Noah

Thanks JD.

I love natty too. And Glad Ben got one more placement and Noah.

Im glad you enjoyed it and THANKS JD for taking my writing so seriously- whether you like it or not. :heart:

*Hugs

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:35 am

EyesPaintedBlack wrote:

JD- Natty, what's wrong?
Natasja- FINE! Wanna know what's wrong? I don't trust her. Lets take away the fact that she's a redhead and think about the situation. Suddenly, she's in town. She's very hush hush about why and suddenly she's drudging up old memories of people neither one of you are anymore.

Whahahahahah. Awesome.

Natasja- (smacks him in the face) Fuck you, JD. I wouldn't be jealous of you if you were a urinal and I was living in a river of piss.

Whahaha. I love myself.

Natasja- Of course I would.
Angelito- Jd is always the one you liked more though.
Natasja- (in a moment of realization) Angel....

Aww, Angel.

JD- Natty, why are you so jealous? It's fucking embarassing. Why don't you stay?
Natasja- Why don't you go jump off a cliff like your father did, you son-of-a-bitch?

I love the drama, and the swearing. Keep it up.

I am glad you like Natasja. Everytime I write something with her character, I am smiling each second or feeling just what she is in that scene. I love her..almost as much as I love u. :heart:

noahcrash · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:38 am

Hellsing wrote:

bhwaha. yeah, you (and you're character) kick major butt.

MadGuy · **Posted:** Sat Jul 05, 2008 9:37 am

noahcrash wrote:

Hellsing wrote:

Will I and Hailey or Z ever share a scene?

I will force it to happen somewhere, sometime.

you better not kill them before we do

or.. me

SERIAL Episode 9- "Loose Ends"

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